Am I missing something here? The text is basic. There isn't anything detailed about the listing. Much more effort could have gone into writing something that would catch people's attention. Not sure if the added effort would have help in the end for either you or the current auction, but it couldn't hurt.
I'd say the key to getting the most exposure is to capture key words that people search for. This is your "meat"..."autos,game used,inserts,star cards,HOF,rookies,graded cards,refractors,short prints as low as 1/1". I am not sure the rest helps you out at all, other than to fill space. Now a list of key names would have captured more search hits, but I didn't see that unless it was and the end of all the pics.
I'd say the key to getting the most exposure is to capture key words that people search for. This is your "meat"..."autos,game used,inserts,star cards,HOF,rookies,graded cards,refractors,short prints as low as 1/1". I am not sure the rest helps you out at all, other than to fill space. Now a list of key names would have captured more search hits, but I didn't see that unless it was and the end of all the pics.